My crazy attempt at love poetry: #2! I've been doing literature; studying texts and poems lately, so, me being me, I had to, at least, try my luck at it. Result? Failure. Complete, utter failure. I tried to make myself sound "mature", tried to inject myself with that sense of... age-old... antiquity... but, alas: the "s" in loser stands not for "success", but for "stupidity". How stupid am I to write something I have no understanding of? Something I have no passion for? The answer to that -- very. Haha.
I took pleasure,
first, in the way he held me
arms wrapping,
as if i was some sort of gift
meant for royalty
loved him
second,
in the way he would say my name,
tender lips grazing the soft edges
of my feverish cheeks,
long, graceful fingers
swooping my face upwards,
brushing me carefully,
as if i was some sort of great art
and he would hold me there
in his embrace.
with one look he made me
weaken, tumble and fall
flat on my back,
eyes wide,
breath short and ragged,
watching,
for he would look at me in that certain way
and there, he had it
had me,
all to himself
and he knew
(oh, yes. he was very certain)
That in those moments,
or whichever moments relevant,
i would allow it
allow anything
the breaking of my mind, my body
my soul.
i am not a gentle person,
not a leaf-lover or holder of hands,
am not romantic
will never be soft and sweet
like those precious girls
dressed in earthly feminity
and godly grace
but for him
for him,
i am willing
and i would allow it
for him,
i would be that porcelain doll
in the antique window
that porcelain doll i had
broken
many years ago.
3 comments:
Aww, hannah!That was beautiful!!! im impressed! more!more! more!!! heh.
Hmmmm nice...... But i think i would comment more on just that word...
It started out just nice, (warming up) with the typical girl love fantasy but in the middle things seemed to have gotten more intense and your ending is something worth reading!!i liked the last line especially, what a good way to end it!! haha.. i hope you understand what i mean......
Lol. Thanks, walltalker. I didn't actually mean for it to be... y'know, girlish; but... haha. Guess I'll have to work on that. And, yeah; the last part kind of struck the nail.
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